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If I were a road, You’d be a traveler
With a broken transmission, slashed tires
And a light that reads empty.

If I were a wreck, You’d be a passenger
With a broken windshield, bruised neck
And a face that reads empty.

If I were death, You’d be a victim
With embalming fluid, fresh makeup
And a body that reads empty.
Came to me within a few minutes. Different approach to my usual, but we'll see. 
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carmennge Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I see why you got a daily deviation on this. Really dark but very very imagistic and made me feel a hollow, empty feeling inside reading it.... good title! :)
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, that means a lot to me! :D 
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Dreamworld88 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014  Student Writer
Wow! I like the imagery.
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2014
Thank you! :)
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My-Sword-is-Bigger Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh wow, this is amazing.
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2014
Thank you! :)
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
great rhythm. the repetition works nicely, too. congrats on the DLD! :)
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
:) Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
you're welcome. :rose:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2014
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Ally-RedTulip Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very well written! Sounds like lyrics. :)
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
Thank you! lol I used to write lyrics. lmao :blushes: I actually just got back into writing. 
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Ally-RedTulip Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Woah, really? That's why... xD That's really awesome, btw!
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
Lol yeah. Thank you! :)
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Prescribed-Madness Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
*Smiles slightly*
Inside your head, no one's there - and I don't think I'll ever be. And I don't care.
Some reason that quote seems to fit this
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
Lol goo goo dolls! :happybounce: 
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Prescribed-Madness Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
//flips out
OH MY GOD YOU KNOW THE SONG
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
:P Of course! lol 
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Prescribed-Madness Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You are now my favourite person ever. Naked by the Goo Goo Dolls is literally my favourite song and hardly anybody knows it
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
Lol thank you! Most people only know Iris, but every band usually has a better song and that song unfortunately no one hears. At least it seems that way. :P
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Prescribed-Madness Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah :I
Iris is a good song, but Naked is just far better. Plus Naked has that repeatability that Iris lacks: after you've heard it once, you've heard it a million times. Naked just never gets old
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BackShelfSouvenir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2014
So true! so true^^ 
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